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Re: SUBMACHINE: The Movie Series (superfanfic text story)

Posted: 16 Aug 2016 13:31
by RuloCore
I had to find a name with capital M...

Re: SUBMACHINE: The Movie Series (superfanfic text story)

Posted: 16 Aug 2016 21:24
by RockyOceanK
I enjoyed most parts but not so much the end. But overall it was ok.
Also,Murtaugh doesn't seem like the person who would start a family. XD I like the way you wrote Liz's part.

Re: SUBMACHINE: The Movie Series (superfanfic text story)

Posted: 17 Aug 2016 01:09
by RuloCore
RockyOceanK wrote: Also,Murtaugh doesn't seem like the person who would start a family.
That's why he abandons it ;)

Re: SUBMACHINE: The Movie Series (superfanfic text story)

Posted: 17 Aug 2016 14:21
by Augustus
Who would leave Liz? Here I am Queen. (Dat quote)

Re: SUBMACHINE: The Movie Series (superfanfic text story)

Posted: 17 Aug 2016 16:44
by RockyOceanK
Ko9 wrote:Who would leave Liz? Here I am Queen. (Dat quote)
Wasn't that quote "Here I am my king"?

Also.
Again,why start a family when all that is in your head is exploring as much of the subnet as you can by being a multidimensional,space/time traveling being that really wants to use his awesome powers.And you go away from anyone (even science) in a lighthouse and go on vacation to a waterfall in order to gain awesome powers.And become unable to see other people except maybe a Liz,you mostly talk to so that you can brag about your achievements.(He also talks to her via letters while he has many kinds of superior technology around him.)

Sure!The perfect family guy. XD

Re: SUBMACHINE: The Movie Series (superfanfic text story)

Posted: 17 Aug 2016 16:46
by Augustus
Ikr. I changed the context so it would fit to liz :D

Re: SUBMACHINE: The Movie Series (superfanfic text story)

Posted: 17 Aug 2016 16:46
by RockyOceanK
Let's add that people to him once were subjects that were used to help him do his exploring business and none of them returned.

"Return unharmed"

Re: SUBMACHINE: The Movie Series (superfanfic text story)

Posted: 17 Aug 2016 16:49
by Augustus
Hah? xD

Re: SUBMACHINE: The Movie Series (superfanfic text story)

Posted: 17 Aug 2016 16:54
by RockyOceanK
I'm still ranting about Mur xD

Re: SUBMACHINE: The Movie Series (superfanfic text story)

Posted: 17 Aug 2016 17:02
by Augustus
I apologize. :P